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Tuesday, February 1, 2011

The Best Story

"Teacher asked us to write stories today", my seven year old told me. "And she said my story was the best in the class."
I asked to see it, and he proudly handed me his battered notebook. Spelling mistakes and grammatical bloopers were generously sprinkled all over, but the story was compelling. The outcome was predictable, the ending was not.
After winning, the good car didn't gloat. He went across to the bad car and said, "Win, lose, it doesn't matter. What matters is that you work hard."

It is the best story I have read in a long time.

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A drabble is a story told in exactly 100 words.

20 comments:

  1. Rayna - What a wonderful story that must have been! I'm sure it means a lot to you that your role modeling of compassion, ethics and giving to others is working :-).

    What I also like about this story is the important lesson of what matters in writing. Spelling and grammar can always be revised; it is the soul of a story that counts!

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  2. Talent and love -- He must have wonderful parents!! :O)

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  3. I love a story with a good moral! And what an adorable photo!

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  4. This is great! I love reading little kid's writings. =)

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  5. I agree! It isn´t perfect spelling that makes a perfect story :D

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  6. You must be so proud. The story has a lovely moral that he obviously learned and is now passing along. I hope he continues to write.

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  7. why does your son's natural compassion not surprise me?

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  8. Perfect! The heart of the story is so much more important than anything else!

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  9. So sweet! He understands that, even at such a young age. :) I hope you're proud of that!

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  10. Aww. He's taking after his mommy. :)

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  11. What a wonderful story, and a sweet picture. That little guy has beautiful eyes.

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  12. And you are so right!! Fabulous story!! Good for him!
    Hugs
    SueAnn

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  13. Oh very good! These little hints you've been teaching the right lessons are good, aren't they?

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  14. Notebooks are best when they're battered from use. And a nice detail that it was handed over proudly.

    He's not the only one who should feel proud. It seems you're doing a great job as role model and mom.

    Well done to both.

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  15. @ Margot - I love the story, because it is exactly what I have been breaking my head to inculcate into them. Just when I was thinking success is a long way off, I get this.
    And there is a lot more to story telling than just being able to write grammatically correct English, isn't there? Though that is no excuse for someone who should know better to make silly mistakes.

    @ Mary - he's a good student.

    @ Ellie - thank you.

    @ Debra - thank you, and thank you.

    @ Tessa - thanks for stopping by. And yes, so do I.

    @ Dorte - and I am glad his teacher realises that too.

    @ Jane - I am VERY PROUD. He's into graphic novels now!!!

    @ Alex - thank you. Moments like this make me feel I am not a total failure.

    @ Jan - he is naturally compassionate- much more so than his mother. I am glad we are able to retain it.

    @ Leigh- thank you.

    @ Diane - it is, and I did.

    @ Jemi - it is, isn't it?

    @ Oddyoddyo13 - proud is an understatement. I am VERY PROUD.

    @ Jenn - that is one thing his mommy is passionate about- hard work, without looking at the result

    @ Patricia - he does, doesn't he? I've always loved his eyes- they convey so much.

    @ Arlee - thank you

    @ SueAnn - thank you. will do.

    @ Hart - sometimes I feel I am banging my head against a brick wall, but then when he does something like this, you realise he is getting it

    @ KjM - they should be battered, shouldn't they? Sign that they have been loved and used.
    Thank you. The guy does seem to be hearing what I keep telling him.

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